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考研英语作文:疯狂背诵30篇(07)

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Directions 7

Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题:

提纲包含了三个部分,这篇文章可以分为四段来写,其中末段是结语。真实写作中前三段可以与提纲有明显的对应关系,这样的安排思路清晰,易于把握。

Sample:

In the pictures, we see clearly a person who claims to begin his grand scheme tomorrow. In the first picture, he claims that he will begin tomorrow because he is not yet well prepared today. In the second picture, when tomorrow really comes, he again says he will begin later because he is not feeling well at the moment.

What can we say at seeing such pictures? We can always find excuses for our mistakes, failures and inaction, but how can we make real progress in our life? We will never ever grow up if we keep on finding excuses instead of looking directly into the matter, analyzing the situation objectively and taking action as soon as possible.

Delay has a lot of bad consequences. In many cases, we will lose the chance to succeed forever. Time is limited, and so are youth and enthusiasm. When we form a plan, we should always try our best to put it into practice immediately. We should not worry about failure, because we can always learn from it. Only if we keep on trying and never stop, will we make progress and eventually turn our dream into reality.
The important thing in life is to have a great aim and the determination to attain it. Without action, a great aim will be nothing more than a castle in the air.

点评:

第一段分别描述了两幅图画,独特之处在于首先将两副图画的共同之处提取出来——描写一个人说明天就要开始宏伟的计划,而后分别描述两副图画的不同之处——这样做的好处是使段落的条理清晰。
第二段的首句使用了设问句,一下子引起了读者的兴趣,而后自己给出答案——我们总是能为错误、失败和无行动找到理由,可是我们又怎能取得进步呢?这个句子中使用了平行的名词和反问句,效果强烈,非常引人注目。该段第三句进一步说明,使用instead of强化了对比关系——如果一直寻找借口而不是直接查清事实、客观分析情况和尽快采取行动的话,我们永远也无法成长。注意句中否定意义的表达:
We will not grow up if...
We will never grow up if...
We will never ever grow up if...
在上述三种表达方式中,我们可以看出,最后一种不仅语气强烈,而且极富韵律。
第三段先说了拖延的坏处,而后说了我们正确的做法。
最后一段做结,共两句话。第一句是引用了歌德的名言,而第二句是反过来说——如果没有行动,伟大的目标就只能是空中楼阁。

心得:

要想写好文章,就要先写好句子,再写好段落。文章大的结构的确定是不难的,关键是写好单个的句子后再将它们有机地组成完美流畅的段落。
第三段就是一个好的例子,这一段分成两个部分,各有三句话,有机地结合在了一起。第一句先是讲拖延有很多坏处,第二句直接解释第一句——在很多情况下,我们就永远失去了成功的机会。注意这句话的写法,首先,使用in many cases表示“在很多情况下”,显得客观,因为不是所有的情形均是如此。其次,使用forever表示“永远”,加强了语气,并且恰如其分地指出了人生的悲怆,点出了韶华易逝的真谛。第三句是对第二句的补充说明——时间是有限的,青春和激情也是如此(句子的后部使用了倒装)。第四句笔锋一转,说明我们一旦有了计划,应当全力以赴立即将其付诸实践,注意这里使用了immediately,是反过来与该段的第一句话进行呼应。第五句说明我们不该担心失败,因为我们总能从中学到东西。末句是以only开头的倒装句,说明行动和结果之间的关系,语气很强。
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